‘Out!’
‘Not out!’
‘You’re out!’
‘No, I’m not!’
And it went on for the next fifteen minutes, Darkness had descended and both teams saw preferentially. The bowler saw the ball hit the concrete slab which they used as a wicket. The batsman saw the ball go past him for a wide. His teammates were equally convinced that the bowler’s foot was out of the crease.
‘I’m going home. It’s getting late.’ the bastman announced. He picked up his bat and ball and trudged off home. The others began drifitng homewards in groups of two or three. Vinay sat on the wicket with his face cupped in his palms. Darkness awakened a quesy sense of dread inside him. He couldn’t stay in the park. No, there were too many mosquitoes and Harsh had heard from the watchman that foxes came out from the woods at night. No, he had to go home. With a sigh he got up and set off from the park.
He took the longest route he knew with street lights. He cut across the lawn to a clump of bushes and high ornamental plants. He crouched low among the plants, brandishing a gnarled, termite ridden branch in his hand. He was a hunter. He was stalking the Savannah lion. He creeped among the bushes, signalling quietly to imaginary companions. He was no ordinary hunter. He was the huntmaster. He was the best of all the tribes. But huntmasters were old. He didn’t want to be old. No. He was a lone hunter trying to make his mark. Yes, that was it. He imagined a movement in the bush and hurled his spear which splintered promptly upon impact. He lapsed into a self invented ‘tribal dance’ to celebrate the kill. He heard something move for real and ran as fast as he could to the road where the lights blazed and everything was visible.
He stood in front of the building, reluctant to go in. He was hungry and tired and itchy from playing in the grass. He crossed the courtyard to the corridor and peeked in. The door was open and he could see the shoe rack across the room. He could see his school shoes, now coated with dust; his white canvas shoes which were slowly turing a pale brown shade due to youthful carelessness on the playground; big black seude shoes but no sandals. He was home. She wasn’t. He sighed and walked back to the courtyard. He sat on the neighbour’s scooter and idly plucked a leaf from the tree beside him. He tore it slowly with relish. It was Mukund, he had kicked him at school.
Mosquitoes were swarming over his head now and they darted again and again to strike him and then flew back away from his reach. They’re Mongols, he thought. He’d read about Mongols in a book in the library.
A man cycled past him at a furious pace, lost his balance and fell. He got up swiftly, hot with embarassment and kicked the ground and his cycle angrily. ‘Fucking slippery road’.
‘Khashayarasha!’ he exclaimed. He had read about Xerxes in the same book.
He was very hungry now. He got off the scooter and walked toards the door, each step taken with utmost reluctance. On the stairs he was Perseus and he slew the Gorgon Medusa. The stick broke when he hit the column.
With a final, heavy sigh he walked to the door. He was Theseus in the dungeon. He walked in to be greeted by that familiar strong, fruity and pungent smell and curses slurred in inebriation.




19 responses so far ↓
Nik // August 28, 2008 at 8:51 pm |
I already told you, I love this one.
The references hit just right.
Prerna // August 30, 2008 at 3:40 pm |
Hey!
The post is just too good.I loved the theme and the way you’ve put it forth.
Couldn’t relate much to the references,though.
Toodles!
Bharat Iyer // August 30, 2008 at 5:51 pm |
Nik: Yeah, random spike of inspiration. Thanks. ^_^
Prerna: Hola, thanks for visiting!
Thanks!
The references are rather obscure, I didn’t expect anyone to get them, some of them aren’t even proper references. I was trying to reflect the haphazard thought process of an imaginative 8-9 year old. Did you get the ending though?
Abhilasha // August 31, 2008 at 8:29 pm |
I dint understand one thing- why was he reluctant to go home?
Im sorry, im a very unintelligent reader…
Prerna // September 1, 2008 at 11:02 am |
@Bharat: My pleasure!

And hmph. Toh I aint that dumb.
And yup,I did,I think. It could be that he had family members that were drunkards or that he owned a bar and lived there. Or maybe,I’m wrong.
Am I?
Prerna // September 1, 2008 at 11:06 am |
Oh,an you’re tagged!
Prerna // September 1, 2008 at 11:07 am |
Oh,and you’re tagged!
Bharat Iyer // September 1, 2008 at 2:01 pm |
Abhilasha: The last sentence explains it. If you can understand that, then all will be clear. Try.
Prerna: Apparently not.
You got it right the first time.
And yes, I saw. I’ll do it soon.
Prerna // September 1, 2008 at 2:21 pm |
Please do.
And for the records,I like comments.
Abhilasha // September 3, 2008 at 2:18 pm |
oh, i understand…
i think i missed the last line pehle :/
you know, the rush to finish a post quickly??
Vasudha // September 12, 2008 at 2:23 pm |
I kinda figured out the hollow feeling. Twas the prelude to crying.
Oh, and Prehru : 8 year old who owned a bar?
Prerna // September 13, 2008 at 9:33 am |
I meant his family.
Bharat Iyer // September 15, 2008 at 1:02 pm |
Prerna: I’ll do it when I have nothing to post.
Abhilasha: Yeah, happens to me too. Skim through the end in a hurry and miss a minor detail.
Vasudha: Strange.
And you need to pay more attention while reading.
Nids // September 16, 2008 at 2:11 pm |
I finally read it this time. Properly I mean, and without rushing. Its very nice. Reminded me of a character from jaane tu.. who lived in her own schizophrenic world; playing this weird game ‘what’s that’. I think at some level everybody does like to get lost in their imaginary world’s to avoid facing reality.
Very well written.
Bharat Iyer // September 16, 2008 at 2:56 pm |
Haha, okay. Interesting character. Yeah, I agree. And I suppose it’s more pronounced the younger you are. I’ve always had an overactive imagination and it helps when shit happens.
Thanks. ^_^
Nids // September 17, 2008 at 12:44 pm |
Ah, so there’s a bit of you in vinay? Neat. I had a feeling.
Vasudha // September 17, 2008 at 12:57 pm |
Why do I need to pay more attention while reading? O.o
Bharat Iyer // September 17, 2008 at 1:51 pm |
Nids: You could say that, yeah.
Vasudha: Um, nothing. My goof up again. Sheesh. >_< *goes to edit the comment*
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